THE MID_AUTUMN FESTIVAL
INTRODUCTION Paragraph1 :
Today is mid- autumn festival.the atmosphere seems interesting and comfortable. After finishing dinner, my roomates and me took to go for walk together in the park. There were a lot of people came here to enjoy this interesting sightseeing. We walked around for a while and then we found out a blend to sit down. While i was looking up the sky to see the moonlight, suddenly my heart felt so sad and missed about the last mid-autumn festival with my family at hometown.
My full name: ĐINH THI HƯỚNG. Mssv:08120015
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The value of friendship
Introduction paragraph 2:
Have you ever imagined that if there is no friend in your life and how is your life?.what will you do when you encouter with complicated and difficult problems?. I’m sure that you will fell so sad if no one stands by to share and to help you . Even you will be failed painfully.you always find it so boring in life. There is a famous saying that “sorrow shared is sorrow halved and joy shared is joy doubled”. Our pleasures will be lost a half without friends share them.so, friendship plays an important role in our life.
* Outline for body and conclusion paragraph:
*Friendship isvery neccessary for us in life. We can’t live without friend, also we can’t survive without water
* when we meet trials and tribulations, friend is the first person stand by to help , to share and to comfort us.
*Friends are the same age as us.therefore, we will find it easy to confide anything.moreover, they can understand us more than anyone else. A good fried is a great source of consolations and comfort in our troubles
* The life with so many difficulties, challenges and complex things which we can’t solve them by ourselves. But if there are a lot,a lot of friends around us, they will give us much more streng, power to defeat them easily.
*There are also many choices which make us reluctant or can not decide something good to do. Maybe we will make a wrong decision.but if there is friend help to give us some right advice, we can select truly.
*wherever friends go with us. Whenever we need a help. So, we will never feel lonely or boring,or exhausested or scared anything
*who has a friend is has a big treasure. So, we should keep what friends we have. We do not hurt our friend’s feeling. We live to help together and make this life more meaningful.
+ grammar: mistakes in 'there is a friend help to give us...', ' friends are the same age as us'.
Trả lờiXóa+ why don't you arrange these small ideas into bigger paragraph in body paragraph.
introductory is ok
Trả lờiXóathe body paragraph have a lot of ideas,you need arrange it
So many grammatical mistakes in both introductions: they together with the outline must be rewritten!!!
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